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Question:
Rewrite the same sentence in your own style and and describe ways in which your revision improved the sentence or made it less effective.

Sentence:
And he ketches Dan’l by the nap of the neck, and lifted him up and says “Why, blame my cats, if he don’t weigh five pound!” And turned him upside down, and he belched out a double handful of shot.

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Dan'l was caught by the nap of the neck. And he turns him upside down and says " why, blame my cats, if he don't weigh five pound!" . With that he belched out a double handful of shot .

My revision improved the sentence because it made it so much more clear and easier the make sense of than the original way.

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